His Sentence:
I won't remember watching you stand by my bed when I can't move, watching you staring down; I won't remember you apologizing for not coming sooner; I won't remember you standing there bored by my beside as I slur words, standing there waiting to feel like you've stayed long enough so that you're a good person and you're allowed to leave.
from feed by M.T. Anderson
The author uses anaphora in this sentence to better convey what the character is trying to say. She repeats the phrase "I won't remember" to show how strong she feels about getting better and not letting go of her life with the boy she loves. The anaphora in this sentence helps the reader to better understand her thoughts.
My Sentence:
You won't forget what happened on that horrible day up in the sky, watching those planes crash into the buildings; you won't forget all the lives that were lost in that tragedy; you won't forget who did this to the people that you loved as you sit alone crying for hours on end as you recollect what happened on September 11, 2001.
1 comment:
This is my favorite of all your sentences. It's a powerful arrangement. Your using is to convey the agony of 9/11 is quite appropriate and just as powerful. Good work!
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